Venturi Poem help, anyhting is taking

[dangerranger01]

Hey everybody, i am an aspiring pulsejet builder. I have made two jam jars, but haven't got one to work right. My dad won't help me, afaird i will blow both of us up. But i had fun. Anyway, i plan on build the real deal later this year in metals class once i learn everything and done more research.

To the point. IN my Advance Comp class we have to do these poems, and i made one about the venturi and what it does. I was wondering if any of you smarter guys can give me more ammo to use in the poem. THis is all i know about it. I will take anything, it just needs to me longer.
P.S. Please don't laugh, i don't know why i am even in this class.

Here it is:

Venturi


It uses the Bernoulli’s principle
you can’t see it done, its invincible
in the interior, of the venturi
The velocity of air increase
as the pressure of it decrease
at the throat, of the venturi
Useful to get a fuel atomized
that's a thing that can’t get compromised
a main function, of the venturi
It always sucks in air like it should
just like a vacuum would
a purpose of the venturi


Thank you for any help you give me
Grant

[larry cottrill]

Grant -

Not bad, actually. I only see two main problems:

First, I think where you say 'invincible', you might mean 'invisible', since you were talking about it not being seen. Invincible means unconquerable, undefeatable. Unfortunately, 'invisible' doesn't rhyme very closely with 'principle', but it might be close enough. Certainly closer than Emily Dickinson got with many of her 'rhyming' lines ;-)

Secondly, you haven't described the shape of the venturi. This is important, because that's what makes it do what it does! It's an interesting problem, because it's an INTERIOR shape, not seen from the outside, necessarily. You could compare it to a classic Coke bottle, or even the shape of a woman's waist. Think a while on that venturi shape and how to describe it in a colorful way.

L Cottrill

[dangerranger01]

Thanks for noticing that, my computer must of automaticly corrected it (I don't really spell well so my notes are always spelled wrong) when i was copying my notes. I will try to work on the shape discription and all. Thanks for the help, i really need an A to keep my 4.0gpa

Thanks again
Grant

[Bruno Ogorelec]

If it's of any help, 'hourglass' (which describes the shape) rhymes with 'pass' (which air must do through a venturi).

[dangerranger01]

Prodigious my friend, i love it. I think I will try to incorporate it into the poem. Based on the length of other students poems in that class, I really am not too worried about this one now. I had thought that everybody would have really long, awesome poems that mine would only be half the size, but i guess that is the opposite!!People toke the easy way out.
Thanks
Grant

[jmhdx]

Damn.

[jmhdx]

Poor spelling really gives the game away!!
Oh and less is more; more, less is. Think Yoda.